Comparison/Contrast Essay 2

Read the following essay written by a student. You will notice that there is no title and no conclusion. Answer the questions that follow.

What would be a good title for this essay?

All countries in the world are unique. When most people think of Haiti, they think of the poorest country in the western hemisphere. What many people do not realize is that not all of the islands in the Carribean are as poor as Haiti. While it does resemble several countries in the Carribean Sea, there are countries which differ from Haiti. In fact, this paper will focus on Haiti and the Bahamas in view of their economy, education, and weather.
The first difference between Haiti and the Bahamas can be traced through their economy. As an example, the Bahamas is a stable, developing nation with economy heavily dependent on tourism and offshore banking. It is organized primarily on a capital model, with some government regulation in many industries. One the other hand, Haiti’s economy is not good. In fact, Haiti’s average annual income is one of the lowest in the western hemisphere. Moreover, vast disparities exist between the incomes of rich and poor countries. 85% of the people live below the absolute poverty line. As you can see, there are stark differences between the economies of Haiti and the Bahamas.
Another difference between Haiti and the Bahamas is their education systems. To illustrate, in the Bahamas, they have a higher education level because they are constantly building universities and colleges. On the other hand, in Haiti there are many people who don’t have any possibility about going to school because due to lack of money. The situation is very bad. Also, in Haiti more than 50% people who live there don’t know how to read and write.
Haiti and the Bahamas also share some great similarities. Indeed, their climate is just about the same. As an example, the climate in Haiti is tropical for the most part and semiarid where the mountain in the east cut off incoming trade winds. The terrain is fair in most part with extensive mountainous formations. Likewise, in the Bahamas, the weather is hot and humid. During the summer the temperature reaches almost 100 degrees. Another similarity is their ethnical background. Both countries have a high percentage of blacks. Altogether, Haiti and Bahamas bear some great similarities.
1. The Bahamas: Land of Opportunity
2. Differences between Haiti and the Bahamas
3. Similarities and Differences between Haiti and the Bahamas
How many differences does the writer provide?
1. 1
2. 2
3. 3
What similarities does the writer provide?
1. the weather and the economy
2. the weather and the ethnic background
3. the ethnic background and the food
What is the problem with including ethnical background in the third paragraph of the body?
1. It is not included in the thesis statement.
2. It is irrelevant.
3. It makes the essay too long.
What would be a good concluding paragraph for this essay?
1. To sum up, Haiti and the Bahamas are not exactly the same. Each country has its own economy and educational system.
2. In conclusion, there are many differences between Haiti and the Bahamas in view of their economy, education, and weather. Although people who live in both countries have different backgrounds, they enjoy the same advantages of living in tropical countries.
3. In conclusion, although Haiti and the Bahamas share the warm weather of the Carribean Sea and populations of the same background, these two countries have take different paths to development. While the people of the Bahamas enjoy a more prosperous life, we can only hope that one day Haitians will share prosperity with them.